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Today I went down to the Bureau of Words to trade in my autumn onomatopoeia. Usually I put it off until at least the end of November, but this year the squelch-thud of my boots in the mounds of soggy leaves brought me up sharp. I went home, gathered my dry snaps, crackles and swooshes, as well as the cheerful spthooshk of a water balloon left over from August and headed down to the department. The rain hurried down to meet my umbrella, an excellent winter sound for which I had no words. But that would soon change.
The stooped man at the front desk greeted me with a finger to his lips. "We're running the barnyard tests, so we've got to be very quiet. Get me?"
I nodded. Fortunately, the entire antechamber of the Bureau is soundproofed, so my rubber soled boots made no sound on the white carpeted floor despite leaving a great deal of mud.
"What do you have in mind for me today? I'm here for the seasonal trade-in deal."
"Well, we've got snow falling on cedars, rain dripping into a puddle of slush, and ice skates on a frozen pond on display, as you can see" he whispered, leaning towards me. "But if you've got something specific in mind, we can check the back-catalogue." His voice had the quality of very thin paper.
"How much can I get for these?" I spread my prior acquisitions on the mahogany desk, each making its proper sound as I touched it. A beautiful cacophony of leaves, sunshine, the murmurs of children and crunching gravel filled the room. The man at the front desk picked up a shcwisk and examined it.
"Are these second-hand?" he asked politely.
"A few are from here. Some of them," I blushed, "I made myself."
He smiled beatifically at me. "They're lovely." I felt a warm, silent glow in my chest. A drop of rain fell from the tip of my nose to the desk below, making the quietest of pings as it hit the wood.
We sat down to make a deal. I bought several of the featured items and a couple I needed for a story set in India, but at that point what I really wanted was a little personal. I stammered it out when he asked me if he could get me anything more.
Snick, snick. My eyes rubbed against their sockets.
"Could you," I leaned closer to him, "whisper for me?"
The man at the desk looked at me in confusion - then threw back his head and laughed. Who would have thought such a deep, rich sound could come from so wrinkled a throat? In another room, I thought I heard a rooster answer. He nodded. "But," he cautioned, "a whisper is not onomatopoeia."
"I'm going to use your voice for the winds on cold snowy days, when the trees speak with one another."
A pause. "Yes. Yes, I can do that for you."
The wizard's face crinkled. He lowered his eyes and brought a scrap of yellow paper to his lips. All the things he told that sheet, I couldn't tell you. I only heard the rustle of his voice.
Despite the total lack of any sort of poetry or prose in my gallery, I'm more of a writer than an artist. This is just a silly little thing I thought up while walking home from school in the rain.
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Given 2008-03-11
The narrator of this little story goes to trade in his autumn onomatopoeia (or funny sounds, if you like) at the Bureau of Words, some of them secondhand, some of them brand new. Swish-Cthunk by ~Squeak-the-Freak is a lovely tribute to the sounds that surround us. ( Featured by lovetodeviate )
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utawoutau Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2009
Hey, Cori! Here's my design for your wonderful story!
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Distorted-Plushie Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2009  Student General Artist
Amazing! It's so creative and... awesome....
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Matte-baka Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2009
This is absolutely fantastic. It's beautiful.
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Masa-chan Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2008
This was exquisite genius, and made me think of Ian McKellan's Gandalf.

His voice sounds like velvet wind.

Agh, I am such a nerd. =/

Anyways, instant+fav! I only wish I could have found this sooner!
It's expertly written, with a perfect amount of irony. And those SFX! Gah.

May I make a suggestion?
I know that this has been posted for quite a while, but don't you agree that putting the SFX in italics would really emphasize them?
Doing that makes them sort-of attack the brain, visually, and that's a really good thing, where writing is concerned. ^^

I'm off to check out the rest of your gallery. And I'm all excited.

:heart:
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Squeak-the-Freak Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2008  Hobbyist
Yes, yes!
I adored that performance. My favourite thing about the movies.
So glad you liked it, and thank you so much for the lovely and uplifting comment.
You know what? Between you and Jazz, I think there will be something here in the very near future. Today even, perhaps.

Howzat for you?

And I like the italic suggestion for Cthunk. I shall re-evaluate it.
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Masa-chan Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2008
^____^ (Gandalf is awesome.)

You are so welcome!

Oh, YAAAAAY! I hope you do post again, soon! :heart:

I will massively be looking forward to it!!!
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Squeak-the-Freak Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2008  Hobbyist
Well, there you are.
Gotta say, I kind of hate DeviantART's new submission system. It seems to me to be needlessly complicated and to produce text with far too much space between the lines.

But it is a piece of writing. I hope you like it.
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Masa-chan Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2008
Yeah, I can't stand the Verdana font myself.

I'm strange, I guess, because I like all of my work uniform in look, and I even print them in Verdana here at home.
Verdana, pt. 10. Haha.

Curse DeviantART! lol

Yeah, I wish they would change it, and make it smaller, or something.
I agree with you about the line-spacing, too, I like it a little more closed in.
It's more impactful, if you ask me. ^^

I've already checked it out, I'm sure you now know. ^^
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Arwen-Istar Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2008
That's so lovely!
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Squeak-the-Freak Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2008  Hobbyist
Thanks a lot, hon.
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